It was a rainy day when my friend was rudely kicked out of his house. He was very angry but I invited him to my house and he spent the night.
I think the word that best describes me is helpful because when someone is in need of help, I always come to take them out of the gutter.One day my mom was sick and nobody was there to help her so I took my brother and 2 sisters outside and fed them and my mom dinner.Then there was the day my friend was moving out of his house and he was carrying a piece of furniture out of his house. he was about to drop it so I helped him carry it.
Anyways, my friend thanked me for letting him spend the night and I felt good for it.
3 comments:
You did a good job in putting details in your story. But you never actually got to your point. I think you should work on not putting so many storys because people get confused about it. Well I think you should try revising your friend prompt again, not trying to be mean or some thing.
Hey that a nice story but you need to work on your hook and your hook has nothing to do with your prompt...you also need more explanations or examples for your details...also did you really mean that you were in "need of help" or did you really mean "I am helpful"
I like how you showed a lot of examples about how your helpful but you didn't explain alot how you are helpful but everything else was good even do they were all examples.
Post a Comment